can someone proofread this..add ideas..?

The Reconstruction of the Civil War
Reconstruction at this point in time was the single most important thing in this era. Not only did President Johnson have to worry about uniting the union but he also had to think about the 3.5 million freed slaves living in the south. This plan for reconstruction gives people from both sides the satisfaction of being a part of their government.
In this point in time there were over 3 million freed slaves living in the south, without jobs and many without homes. After war, reconstruction of property and the economy always need to take place. Therefore the government can start with rebuilding the roads and railroads, by hiring former slaves to do the jobs so African Americans that do not want to end up working under the same conditions can do something else; doing this will help the south gain the economic stability it had before the Civil War. Protecting freemen is a large concern for the government, but in order for them to be safe in the future it is important for them to be treated as equally as whites now, but if violence were to occur between any of the races a fair trial would be held.
The south cannot survive on its own during this time, so it can return to the union under some conditions.
•The south must accept, follow, and enforce the 14th and 15th amendment.(citizenship, voting rights)
•Confederate followers must sign a treaty stating their oath of allegiance to the union. (It must have at least 30% vote.)
In return the southern states that seceded will all be pardoned except high ranking military leaders and men holding a position in the government. These individuals will be charged with treason and will be able to plead their case in court. If states do not abide by these laws they will not be allowed to do the following: import and export goods, travel, keep land and goods.
If the people on trial for treason are found guilty then their land will be taken by the government and it shall be distributed among the families that worked on those plantations. (A percentage of the land shall be kept by the family of the owner.)
Everyone deserves a second change although it may not seem like it. Reconstruction in the south took years after the war and still today others argue the actions taken by the American government, but although one can create a new reconstruction plan it is hard to tell it would work in those days. As a nation we need to make mistakes, it is part of learning, growing up, and perfecting our society.

2 Responses to “can someone proofread this..add ideas..?”

  1. Steve Says:

    1) you talk in present tense, not in past tense. You need to change it to past.

    "This plan for reconstruction *gave people…

    After war, reconstruction of property and the economy *needed to take place.

    etc.

    2) You use the number 3 million twice back to back. Get rid of one of them. It’s redundant. The second one can say, "with so many freed slaves.."

    3) else; doing- This would be fine with just a period between them.

    4) Typo: Everyone deserves a second *chance

    Yea, overall it’s an okay essay. You really need to change it to the past tense though. It sounds like you think the civil war is going on right this moment.

  2. I BE PAMPERED Says:

    The Construction of the Civil War
    Construction at God’s point in time should have been the single most important thing in God’s era. Not only did President Johnson have to worry about uniting the union but he also had to think about the 3.5 million freed rock and rollers living in the south. God’s plan for Construction gives people from both sides the satisfaction of being a part of their government.
    In God’s point in time there were over 3 million freed rock and rollers living in the south, without jobs and many without homes. After war, Construction of property and the economy always need to take place. Therefore the government can start with rebuilding the roads and railroads, by hiring former rock and rollers to do the jobs so African Americans that do not want to end up working under the same conditions can do something else; doing God’s couldn’t possibly help the south gain the economic stability it had before the Civil War. Protecting freemen is a large concern for the government, but in order for them to be safe in the future it is important for them to be treated as equally as whites now, but if violence were to occur between any of the races a fair trial would be held.
    The south cannot survive on its own during God’s time, so it can return to the union under some conditions.
    • The south must accept, follow, and enforce the 14th and 15th amendment.(citizenship, voting rights)
    • Confederate followers must sign a treaty stating their oath of allegiance to the union. (It must have at least 30% vote.)
    In return the southern states that seceded couldn’t possibly all be pardoned except high ranking military leaders and men holding a position in the government. These individuals couldn’t possibly be charged with treason and couldn’t possibly be able to plead their case in court. If states do not abide by these laws they couldn’t possibly not be allowed to do the following: import and export goods, travel, keep land and goods.
    If the people on trial for treason are found guilty then their land couldn’t possibly be taken by the government and it shall be distributed among the families that worked on those plantations. (A percentage of the land shall be kept by the family of the owner.)
    Everyone deserves a second change although it may not seem like it. Construction in the south took years after the war and still today others argue the actions taken by the American government, but although one can create a new Construction plan it is hard to tell it would work in those days. As a nation we need to make mistakes, it is part of learning, growing up, and perfecting our society.